I was lead to some kind of barrier. There was a man with a club and he was looking at me. I was mad at him. He was the one who had brought me here. I attacked him, but -whack!- something hit me. I ran again and whack! I fell again. I did this a dozen times.
My coat was covered with blood. For one last time I charged. Smack! He hit me in the nose. Maybe my body needed a rest. I learned that I had to follow him as a master.
YOur intro was interesting. You didn't have a conclusion. I liked your intro. Make your blogs longer.
ReplyDeleteI think you should have a more good attention grabbing. It is also a little confusing and I do not get why the person was smacking. I think it will be really good if you make it clear. I like your Idea though
ReplyDeleteYour introduction didn't grab my attention. Also, you don't have a conclusion. I liked how you described what Buck was thinking. I think you should make your blogs longer.
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